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Don’t go far off, not even for a day, because –
because — I don’t know how to say it: a day is long
and I will be waiting for you, as in an empty station
when the trains are parked off somewhere else, asleep.

Don’t leave me, even for an hour, because
then the little drops of anguish will all run together,
the smoke that roams looking for a home will drift
into me, choking my lost heart.

Oh, may your silhouette never dissolve on the beach;
may your eyelids never flutter into the empty distance.
Don’t leave me for a second, my dearest,

because in that moment you’ll have gone so far
I’ll wander mazily over all the earth, asking,
Will you come back? Will you leave me here, dying?

    I really liked this poem because once again it is about love. It is basically saying that the speaker needs his loved one to survive. Although it is very moving and deep, I feel it is too needy, and not how I feel at all. I guess the speaker really needs his loved one by his side. I can relate to it even though it is too over the top. I once felt the need for someone. The feeling of losing someone can make you think life can’t go on without them. But it can and will.

   My favorite line in the poem is “Oh, may your silhouette never dissolve on the beach;
may your eyelids never flutter into the empty distance.” I like this line beacause I can picture his woman’s body and face. I also love the way he words it especially  “may your eyelids never flutter into the empty distance.”

    I also like the line “the smoke that roams looking for a home will drift
into me, choking my lost heart.” I love the metaphor he uses. It makes the feeling of being choked up from love so much deeper and moving.